rate this poem

this is a poem my big sister amde a few years back…no she did not copy it and i will get vrey amd/offeneded fi you say you dont beliecve she wrote it becasue she is a very good peom writer…if you could would you rate it pelase…1/10…well ehre goes

on september eleventh lives were lost
these lives were takin at americas cost
this tragic day changed are nation
just as mcuh as our generation
all i know is americas strong
we will find bin laden
and it wont be long
so always have faith in the usa
and remember september eleventh this most tragic day

nice poem! 10/10

ill eb sure to elt my sis know u like it lol she ahs entered it in 3 compitions and got 2n place in 1 of them :slight_smile:

thats a nice poem

On september eleventh lives were lost
these lives were takin at america’s cost
this tragic day changed our nation
just as much as our generation
all I know is america’s strong
we will find Bin Laden
and it wont be long
so always have faith in the USA
and remember september eleventh, this most tragic day

Did some grammatical corrections for you :slight_smile: 8/10

[QUOTE=owl]On september eleventh lives were lost
these lives were takin at america’s cost
this tragic day changed our nation
just as much as our generation
all I know is america’s strong
we will find Bin Laden
and it wont be long
so always have faith in the USA
and remember september eleventh, this most tragic day

Did some grammatical corrections for you :slight_smile: 8/10[/Qerm ty i guess lol

Thats a lovely peom i rate 10/10 sniff

That was a really good poem, some advice. work on the grammatical errors in the poem and it will be alot better. i rate that 9/10

pretty nice but kinda short. im sure u could think of more to add to it, or ur sister could 8/10.